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Begin Writing Here:
The Mysterious small appearance in the night sky
[Introduction]
Have you ever wondered how a star is formed well you're in like keep on reading and you will get those answers. Some stars comes only, on Matariki those stars are all sisters. Stars are made out of gas and dust. Did you know that all the star in our galaxy has its own story?
[Paragraph 1 -Life cycle of a star]
All stars are born in the center of nebulae. Nebulae is a huge clouds of dust and gas collapse under gravity forming protostars. These young stars goes further collapse, forming main sequence stars. Some stars expand as they grow old. When a star is born there is a constant battle between the star and gravity.
[Paragraph 2 -Types of stars]
Some stars are yellow, blue and red and also did you know that the sun is a star and it is the closest star to earth ?. Some stars are red those stars are dwarf stars. There are also dwarf giant stars. Some stars are double that means there are two stars together to form a double star. The biggest star discovered by astronomers is the VY canis Majoris.
[Paragraph 3 -General Information]
In Ancient times civilization knew when a year had passed by observing changing patterns in the star.
Did you know that the force of gravity inside is so intense that nothing can escape it, not even light?
When a giant star begins to die, its core, or center, shrinks. Did you know that all star in our galaxy has a story?
[Conclusion]
An exploding star three time larger than the sun will leave behind a core about 25 kilometres (15 miles across. Some star are like a ball of fire made out of gas and Heat. Stars has different colours from each other. But some star has the same. All star in our solar system is born in the center of nebulae.

Kia ora Rita,
ReplyDeleteWell done on completing your speedwrite within the 40 minutes.
Your next learning steps:
1) Check your writing for spelling errors. (For example in your introduction it should be ‘luck’ not ‘like.’)
2) Proofread your work to find punctuation and grammatical errors. It is also good to read your work aloud to check that it makes sense. For example the last sentence of your introduction should be: Did you know that all the stars in our galaxy have their own story?
spencer HI your next step is to make your writing bigger
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