Commenting on Room 8 Paerata School

Hi Room 8,
I am Rita from Hay Park School.
I really like the videos of the calf club floral demonstration day and all of the foods that you have made they looks so delicious.
I have a question about the calf club floral demonstration when can you celebrate calf club floral demonstration? What is so special about
calf club floral demonstration?

From Rita

Hi everyone this is my comment to Paerata School.
Here is the website for there Blog http://room8paerata.blogspot.co.nz/

5/06/2015 Speed write The Mysterious Shooting Stars (My draft 2 of My Information Report About Stars)

                                                   The Mysterious Shooting Stars             

                    

[Introduction]

Have you ever wondered how a star is formed well you're in luck keep on reading and you will get those answers. Some stars comes only on Matariki ,those stars are all sisters,. Did you know that all the star in our galaxy has its own story .

[Paragraph 1 -Life cycle of a star]

All stars are born in the center of nebulae. Nebulae is a huge clouds that is made out of  dust and gas. The dust and gas collapse under gravity forming protostars. These young stars goes further collapsing, forming main sequence stars. Some stars expand as they grow old. When a star is born there is a constant battle between the star and gravity.

[Paragraph 2 -Types of stars]

Some stars are yellow, blue and red. Also did you know that the sun is a star and it is the closest star to earth? The stars that are red is a dwarf stars. There are also dwarf giant stars. Some stars are double that means there are two stars together to form a double star. The biggest star discovered by astronomers is the VY canis Majors.

[Paragraph 3 -General Information]

In Ancient times civilization knew when a year had passed by observing changing patterns in the star.

Did you know that the force of gravity inside is so intense that nothing can escape it, not even light?

When a giant star begins to die, its core, or center, shrinks. Did you know that all star in our galaxy has a story?

[Conclusion]

An exploding star three time larger than the sun will leave behind a core about 25 kilometres (15 miles across. Some star are like a ball of fire made out of gas and Heat. Stars has different colours from each other. But some star has the same. All star in our solar system is born in the center of nebulae.

My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading/title:
is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)	yes
My opening paragraph/introduction:
says what my report is about in a clear way	yes
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification	yes
outlines the main features of the subject	yes
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)	yes
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	yes
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	yes
include specific, technical vocabulary
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found

4/6/2015 Speed Write The Mysterious small appearance in the night sky

My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading/title:
is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)	yes
My opening paragraph/introduction:
says what my report is about in a clear way	yes
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification	yes
outlines the main features of the subject	yes
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)	yes
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	yes
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	yes
include specific, technical vocabulary
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found

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Begin Writing Here:

                                                 The Mysterious small appearance in the night sky                   

                    

[Introduction]

Have you ever wondered how a star is formed well you're in like keep on reading and you will get those answers. Some stars comes only, on Matariki those stars are all sisters. Stars are made out of gas and dust. Did you know that all the star in our galaxy has its own story?

[Paragraph 1 -Life cycle of a star]

All stars are born in the center of nebulae. Nebulae is a huge clouds of dust and gas collapse under gravity forming protostars. These young stars goes further collapse, forming main sequence stars. Some stars expand as they grow old. When a star is born there is a constant battle between the star and gravity.

[Paragraph 2 -Types of stars]

Some stars are yellow, blue and red and  also did you know that the sun is a star and it is the closest star to earth ?. Some stars are red those stars are dwarf stars. There are also dwarf giant stars. Some stars are double that means there are two stars together to form a double star. The biggest star discovered by astronomers is the VY canis Majoris.

[Paragraph 3 -General Information]

In Ancient times civilization knew when a year had passed by observing changing patterns in the star.

Did you know that the force of gravity inside is so intense that nothing can escape it, not even light?

When a giant star begins to die, its core, or center, shrinks. Did you know that all star in our galaxy has a story?

[Conclusion]

An exploding star three time larger than the sun will leave behind a core about 25 kilometres (15 miles across. Some star are like a ball of fire made out of gas and Heat. Stars has different colours from each other. But some star has the same. All star in our solar system is born in the center of nebulae.

The Mysterious appearances in the sky

 The Mysterious appearances in the sky

My Explanation Writing Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading:
is the question WHY DOES THE MOON LOOK DIFFERENT EVERY NIGHT?	yes	yes
My opening paragraph/introduction:
introduce what my writing is about in a clear way	yes	yes
hooks the reader	yes	yes
clear topic sentence and supporting sentences	yes	yes
3-4 sentences maximum	yes	yes
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
clear topic sentence and supporting sentences	yes	yes
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	yes	yes
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	yes	yes
include specific, technical vocabulary	yes	yes
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)	yes	yes
connectives and time connectives	yes	yes
descriptive language	yes	yes
formal language	yes	yes
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points	yes	yes
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found	yes	yes
write an interesting fact	yes	yes

Introduction:

Have you ever wondered why the Moon changes its appearance every day when you look up at the sky? Well keep reading and you will get those answers. Also Did you know that there is eight phases of the moon and the eight phases appears every night? I will put the eight phases name in one of my paragraphs.

First paragraph: (Why do we see less of the Moon and the shadows.)

When the moon orbits the Earth, we might see less of the illuminated side

It is because the moon is tilted so we can't see the other side of the moon. Some people believe that the shadow are causing the different appearance of the moon and shape. But it's not the shadows the causes this shape it is the Earth that causing the moon to change its appearance every night. When it is  a waxing gibbous moon it looks like a potato.    

Second paragraph: (The different phases of the Moon.)

Earth’s moon has eight different phases. Here is the phases of the moon in order: New moon, waxing crescent, First quarter, Waxing gibbous , Full moon, Waning gibbous, Last quarter,Waning crescent and then a New Moon. It takes a month for the Moon to be a new Moon then it will start all over again in the same cynical.

Third paragraph: (The Moon's orbit around earth and its move meant.)

The Moon is orbiting the Earth and the Earth is constantly moving every time because it is orbiting the sun. The Moon therefore travels slightly more than 360° to get from one new moon to the next. A lunar month is a time that the moon takes a complete cycle of its phases and is measured from New Moon to New Moon. How long does it take for a lunar month? It takes 29 days, 12 hours, 43 minutes, 11.6 seconds.

Conclusion:

Overall, now that you know why the moon changes its appearance every night, its phases and the orbiting. I hope this inspired you to create your own explanation report about the Moon. Here is a link if you want to learn more information about the Moon. If you were in the northern or the southern hemisphere the moon will look like a upside down moon.

http://www.primaryhomeworkhelp.co.uk/moon/facts.htm